I didn't really know what to expect so I was glad to have a notepad with me... we were going to do some work!
We were asked to write about a situation between us and someone else that was emotionally charged in first person. (I think those were her words... but since I don't have exact notes, I'm guessing! Old age... memory is never as good...lol)
Might I add that I missed the part about writing it in first person, so wrote it in third...duh!
I enjoyed it...lol!
We had ten 10 minutes...
I have included both attempts at the bottom of this post.
Personally, I prefer the first but I'd be interested to hear what you think. I'm not sure either are any good, but for ten minutes... there is not a lot more you can expect. Anyway, the point of it was to try to get into the other characters head.
According to Debi I was the compassionate type since I did actually feel for my sister and could relate better to her than to myself!
The point Debi made was that different perceptions, characters and roles are important. You need to see things from their eyes to make the plot work better. She was planning to expand on this idea on another workshop (unfortunately I did not attend that one on the next day...)
We did consider the following:
Introduce the main character. Create some form of instability. Ask yourself, does the writing grab you? Resist the urge to info dump... don't try to tie up all the knots! (this linked in well with Harry bingham's workshop on "the Art of the Pause..." - more on that later)
A linear narrative is not always the most effective. E.g. The Night Circus, Water For Elephants, the Time Travellors Wife
What happens? What do they want? What do they do to get it?
Make 3D characters...
Move the story forward... narrative drive.
Be careful with the use of subplots. Think about your underlying theme...
Start on a high, has to be an outcome of their character...
Debi quoted, Chandler... When you can't think what happens next, bring in a man with a gun...
and Chekhov... If there's a gun on the wall in Act 1, it must be fired in Act 3.
If you have coincidences, explain and justify. Even the most plausible ones look wrong once they are written down.
* SHOW don't TELL
* Add more and more layers to a person gradually (this made me think of Shrek and his layers..."I'm an onion not a parfait!")
* "Vivid" writing - explain...
* Revision... (don't I know this one)
Can you sum up your plot in a single paragraph? Or in a single sentence?
Personally, I hate this challenge...although I did come up with a one line description for HYBRID...
One man's journey of discovery. (I used it in a tweet! lol!)